Longboarding

Two seasoned feet dance,
Careening on a longboard,
Between spring and fall.


--Brent Logan (2014)

3 responses to “Longboarding”

  1. Kathi Avatar
    Kathi

    I ADORE this haiku! I keep reading and rereading and shaking my head at the marvelous ambiguity of the final line! You get an A+!

  2. Brent Logan Avatar

    Thank you so much! Thirty-four years in waiting, I finally get my A+! :-)

    I credit my high school English teachers. ;-)

  3. Brent Logan Avatar

    Update. I changed “reveling” to “careening.” Before I posted, I had “descending” there, but that was too dark for my tastes. Careening captures the movement and my lack of control. Besides, it just sounds right. :-)