Longboarding

Two seasoned feet dance,
Careening on a longboard,
Between spring and fall.


--Brent Logan (2014)

3 Comments

I ADORE this haiku! I keep reading and rereading and shaking my head at the marvelous ambiguity of the final line! You get an A+!

Update. I changed “reveling” to “careening.” Before I posted, I had “descending” there, but that was too dark for my tastes. Careening captures the movement and my lack of control. Besides, it just sounds right. :-)

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